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"Today Fairy Lake is an oasis of quiet where you can explore the natural beauty along the perimeter path or listen to music at the bandshell on a Sunday. But over a century ago this was an industrial site. In 1880 Isaac Bowman and Henry Zinkan built a tannery on the shore of Little Lake, as it was then known. By 1888 the tannery employed 20 to 25 people. It grew to become Southampton's major employer, until a fire destroyed it on July 31, 1900, throwing 100 out of work. Houses were built on the site, called Tannery Hill, where you may still pick up pieces of tanning bark and burnt leather."

I really like this caption because it was condensed with its information. There were specific points and terms that are used in this like dates, places, and statistics. It has a lot of the who, what, where, when, and how that make it talking about something directly. Another thing I like about it is that you can assume what a lot of the places are because they leave clues around, so instead of saying something like, "So and so, the blah blah blah, was doing this." They sort of incorporate the information into the overall paragraph. It makes it possible to assume things without actually having them pop out at you. One of the things I didn't like about it was that it was all over the place. There was just a LOT to talk about and some of the information wasn't that interesting. It was less a fun fact and more of an informational boring fact. Even so, the thing I can take from this is the skill of condensing information so you give the reader more info in less words. I try and give good critiques to the people doing the captions, and I think this is a good example of condensing ideas.